Comments on: Music is fluid http://www.aucklandpoetry.com/wordpress/2008/04/11/music-is-fluid/ Poems posted by the poets Fri, 04 Jul 2008 07:41:54 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.2.2 By: aebra http://www.aucklandpoetry.com/wordpress/2008/04/11/music-is-fluid/#comment-239 aebra Sun, 11 May 2008 10:44:55 +0000 http://www.aucklandpoetry.com/wordpress/2008/04/11/music-is-fluid/#comment-239 I like the image of fluidity and movement. Oozing is a great word! I think you're trying too hard to make the poem rhyme though... just let it flow- "of the land" doesn't feel right. The word choices feel a little unnatural in parts like that. The rest is beautiful. I like the image of fluidity and movement. Oozing is a great word! I think you’re trying too hard to make the poem rhyme though… just let it flow- “of the land” doesn’t feel right. The word choices feel a little unnatural in parts like that. The rest is beautiful.

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